Wednesday, December 18, 2013

three word FORM writing class report based on the work of Prof. Stanley Fish

November 25, 2013
Mrs. J’s Musings               On Words…..     completed December 17, 2013


”A word is …the skin of a living thought…” -Oliver Wendall Holmes

“Liesel … was a girl. In Nazi Germany. How fitting that she
was discovering the power of words.”  -Markus Zusak The Book Thief

“…what a power there was in words …a healing power, a solution,
like the breaking of a barrier.” –Ayn Rand The Fountainhead

‘”But words are things and a small drop of ink, falling like a dew upon a thought, produces that which makes thousands, perhaps millions think.” –Lord Byron

“Words could be wizards themselves.” –Nolan Oler, age 10 Oct. 9, 2013

After adding second and third sentences: -Caydee Wilde Age 8 Nov 6, 2013
“It is like you are building a staircase of words.”

Writing class report:
The power of words and FORMS………… as espoused by Professor Stanley Fish
In How to Write a Sentence and How to Read one has greatly influenced this work.

Quoting Professor Fish:
“Only one rule to follow: make sure every component of your sentence is related to the other components in a way that is clear and unambiguous.”

“And how do you know that? Not by learning the rules, but by coming to know the limited number of relationships your words, phrases and clauses can enter into, and becoming alert to those times when the relationships are not established or are unclear……”

“As with any skill, this one develops slowly. You start small, with three word sentences, and after you have advanced to the point where you can rattle off their structure on demand, you go on to the next step and another exercise.”


The ongoing and long term goal of this class is to prove that learners of all ages can gain skill in recognizing the basic noun-verb-object FORM in written work and practice it in personal writing until proficiency is achieved; using this proficiency as a foundation for deepening understanding of the relationships among words. –this day, November 25, 2013 Linda AJ Johnson

The following concepts were introduced and ‘played’ into understanding during on-line and home visits from September 10 to December 10, 2013.

1.    We identified 3 word or ‘kernel sentence’ in excerpts from great picture books.
2.   We identified the subject, the verb and the object (if used) in the ‘kernel’ sentence and discussed their roles and relationships.
3.   We came to understand that all other words (determiners, adjectives, adverbs, etc. whether alone or in phrases) are meant to add detail to the ‘kernel’ sentence.
4.   We began to understand the only rule that matters: all the relationships among the words in a sentence have to make sense.
5.   We realized that FORMS repeat but content has endless variety.
6.   We discussed how content reveals author style.
7.   We had fun pouring our own content into FORMS.

*We began to expand our great topic sentences into 3 to 5 sentence paragraph.
*We had fun creating nonsense sentences – following the example of “The Jabberwocky” by Lewis Carroll.
*We also tried our hand at poetic line.

Please enjoy our efforts as you identify the learning that has occurred.

KERNEL SENTENCES
The ‘kernel’ sentence is composed of two parts: the subject – whatever is performing the action, and the verb – whatever action is being performed.
An object may be receiving the action. Ie. Bill collects coins.  

“I am building Egypt.” Jarom  age 5

I am playing with Lego.                       You are talking.
He is writing.                                   She is making salsa.
They are happy.                         -Caleb age 8


I am writing a sentence.                      You are a woman.
She is (also) a woman.                          He is a man.                         
They are my friends.                    -Sean age 10


I am drawing a fairy queen.                  We are helping flood victims.
I am paying soccer.                             She is washing her hands.
He is flying his seaplane.                      You were asking a question.
–Jianna age 12                                   -Nolan age 10, Cole age 13




EXPANDED KERNEL SENTENCES
After breakfast the little brown bunny hopped through the fluffy snow over the hill to visit his friend. –Benson age 12

Last Friday we dug lots of potatoes in our rather large garden on our acreage in Welling. –Sean

Tom and Betty carefully ran in the 50-yard dash after really thinking about it.
–Smith family

Last Saturday we built a rather big dog run in our backyard for our dag, Ebony, and her eight puppies. –Caleb

The bright blue elf popped out of the pretty Christmas box in front of the Christmas tree and surprised the excited kids at the town party at the community centre. –Nolan

We went home when the night was darkening and the moon rose and the snow fell to the ground. –Nyree age 11

My aunties made alligator cake for my mom’s birthday and delivered it at midnight. (true!) –Tane age 16


NONSENSE CONTENT

Every Tuesday, our gray haired great-grandma races quickly around the big racetrack in her orange scooter to win snacks for bingo on Wednesday. -Sean

The thirsty giant clumsily knitted an umbrella for his finger while sitting in the fridge. –Caleb

On her birthday, our granny raced wildly through the snow. Her blue scarf fluttered in the wind. – Jianna

Sometimes the weird orchestra plays Beethovens’ 5th Symphony hanging from trees branches. –Nolan, Cole

Usually the mutant planet sings loudly at midnight during a neutron star apocalypse. –group effort

After breakfast my crazy grandma raced quickly to Hawaii with her pink Snickerdoodles. –Brinley age 10

Every afternoon the circus clown skillfully cooks steak and rice in a purple pan while riding his unicycle around the Big Top. –Kingi age 9
POETIC LINE

The Christmas presents are lovely,
They sparkle under the tree.
I gazed upon their gift tags
Wondering which one was for me?

They all looked so different,
So skinny, fat or tall,
Their paper, oh, how shiny!
Are they truly real at all?
                  -Jianna

My Christmas chicken is a parrot
It has a purple beak,
That looks like a potato 
And German it does speak.

He loves to eat chocolates
With caramel inside
And flies around the chimney
Giving me a ride.
- Sean

My Christmas sheep is fluffy.
It hasn't been shaved
And it lives with the dust bunnies
That never behave.

My sheepy eats fish
From a garbage can,
And shares with his bunny friends
In their Dodge Caravan.
- Caleb

Your Christmas party was great fun.
It held a big surprise,
Which came sliding down the chimney
Amid some startled cries.

He came up in the pudding
And sputtered when he spoke,
Here is your Christmas candy!
And blew a ring of smoke.
                  -Mrs. J

Most Christmas' in Canada
Are all magical and white.
All Christmas' are special,
Our parties go into the night.
Nationwide joy floats outside
With it comes trees and lights
Snow and fun hot chocolate when done
As Christmas season comes.
-Peter age 13

Our Christmas tradition is special
We do it on Christmas Eve;
We go to our Aunties to party,
We serve as we roll up our sleeves.

We love to eat with the “Frenchies”
Chocolate, poutine and treats,
They call it ‘revellion’.
At Christmas it’s hard to beat!
-Nyree

*My Christmas puppy is from China, 
Her eyes shine like dew.
She likes to cuddle on my lap.
I call my panda, Bamboo.
-Brinley

My Christmas puppy is called Scraps,
He eats lunch from my shoe
And takes naps in my stocking.
I love you Scraps, I do.
-Caydee

Santa’s elves were wrapping
Tortoises and Lego,
Wrote a boy named Sean
On November 12.

He was hoping to get them for Christmas
Because they were pretty much
The only things on his list.
So he wrote the sentence
Even though he knew that
He had no chance
Of getting them at all.

EXPANDING INTO PARAGRAPHS

*Yesterday the fluffy white bunny hopped in the sparkly
Snow through the woods over the hill to Santa’s workshop.
She was just in time to see the hockey game. –Brinley age 10

*This morning, as the sun rose up above the snow covered earth, Jack Frost sneakily skipped across the glassy lake, sending arches of frost on all shapes and sizes, up trees and lampposts and down the street of the sleepy village. He finished his work with a swish of wind and happily sat on a branch of an old oak tree and sighed at the beautiful job he had done. –Jianna

*The North Pole lays quietly in an icy white desert of snow. –Benson
Looking south, I see a little town hidden in an ice-covered valley. As I get closer a blue flag appears, hanging limply from a candy cane tower. This is the right place. I walk to the red wooden door and pull the bell chain. As the door swings open I hear Christmas music. A mama elf stands in the opening.

“Honey,” she cries. “I am so glad you are home!”

I throw down my empty toy bag and hug Mrs. Claus.
–group work by Benson, Brinley and Caydee

*Every December 17, our whole family goes to the Senior Center to have a big party. We open presents and eat food. (My grandma is a very good cook) We have a talent show and then we leave.

On Christmas Eve, my other side of the family comes to our house. We eat and chat and at the end of the night we all open the presents we bought each other. Then we go home. -Adam age 13

*Usually the unexpressive cookie jumps into the cookie jar while wearing a smile. He never breaks after jumping in because his cookie pals catch him before he hits the bottom; but this time he fell so hard he broke and his friends now joke, “That’s the way the cookie crumbles.” –Cole age 13

*As John saw the school clock tick away his freedom, he pulled out his history book and sighed in disappointment. It was his birthday and there was a long desert of time to cross until he could get home to his party. –Nolan age 10

A thrill of excitement rushed through me as I stepped on the plane with my dad, my sister, Janae and Josh, my brother. The flight attendant welcomed us on. The first thing I noticed about him was his shiny baldhead and a patch of blond hair on the tip of his chin. He smiled and pointed to our seats. We all sat down. The plane was quite crowed with men, women, babies and children and I noticed that the man in front of us was really hairy. His head and arms were covered with thick white hair. I giggled at the thought of a hairy polar bear.


After the flight attendants demonstrated how to use the safety equipment in case of emergency, the plane started down the runway, gaining speed as it ascended into the air. After straightening out from the take off the plane glided smoothly through the fluffy white clouds as it headed for Whitehorse. –Jianna age 12

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