FORMS: changing ORDER changes VOICE creates STYLE

Dec 2, 2013

Hi Writers,

 Remember the FORMS of our sentences - adverbs of time, kernel sentences, several phrases adding details. Read through my samples, try a few of your own and discover the effect (power) of putting the parts in different order.

----Mrs. J

After supper

At the close of the day,

Before putting on my pajamas

and brushing my teeth,

I found the door to the North Pole.

Or

I found the door to the North Pole

Before putting on my pajamas and

Brushing my teeth,

After supper

At the close of the day.

During the blizzard

While the wind howled

And the snow blew in hard

From the north,

We watched beachcombers on TV

And ate popcorn.

Or

We watched Beachcombers on TV

And ate popcorn,

While the wind howled

And the snow blew in hard

from the north,

During the blizzard,

  

Long ago and far away

As a a star lit up the hills of Judea

Where shepherds guarded their sheep,

Baby Jesus lay in a manger,

In a stable

In Bethlehem.

Or

In Bethlehem,

Baby Jesus lay in a manger

In a stable,

As a star lit up the hills of Judea

Where shepherds guarded their sheep.

Long a go and far away.